Neopoet Random Challenge 2

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When I Am Old... [Random Challenge 2]

When I am old
I will put away my toys
I will eat less junk food
Eat stuff good for growing boys

I will look at older women
and I'll whistle less
I'll clean up my junky room
I'll make less a mess

But for now, I'm playing
It's such fun to be
A youngster in my mind
Instead of seventy-three

About This Poem

Last Few Words: My wife just called me a little kid, wanting to play with my new toy, [a B.B. gun].

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

Gee,

Hey man, its good to read your work.
Absolutely no critique.
Just appreciation, enjoyment, and a lot of identifying with you, through the poem.

do something about that last line in the first stanza; but I'm glad that you enjoyed this. It's so nice to see you here again. I hope that we will see much more from you. It's not only Cat that has missed you. Join our random challenges and enter the monthly contests! Write something, anything! ~ Geez.
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dear Sir Gee,

thank you for a peek into the mind of a "Peter Pan" lost boy. I really liked this piece of work! we may be old but we still can dream and imagine!

p.s.
I turned 70 last February

Congrats on your seventieth...

Yes, I always tell people that I suffer from terminal Peter Pan Syndrome! I'm never going to grow up until I die! LoL
Thank you for your reads and comments, you are an inspiration to the children in us! ~ Geez.
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