I’m not like the other girls
Not in the way I’m obsessed with boys
And want their slutty attention,
But in a sense I wish I was
Or at least worried about their mentions.
I crave my own time
To sit and write and sigh
On my lonesome
But I’m not lonely
I have my own mind.
I don’t really know,
what type of girl I am
But I’m fine in my skin
that repulses the norm,
scares away the comforted
while inviting the disturbed.
Last Few Words: I haven’t really posted a poem in a while, but this is what’s been on my mind.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Your poem "What kinda girl am I?" explores the speaker's sense of individuality and self-awareness in relation to societal expectations. The contrast between the speaker's introspective nature and the perceived norms of femininity is effectively conveyed. The use of language like "slutty attention" and "repulses the norm" creates a strong sense of defiance and non-conformity.
One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the theme of self-discovery. You could delve deeper into specific experiences or moments that have shaped the speaker's understanding of themselves. Adding more vivid imagery or concrete examples could help to enhance the emotional impact of the poem and make it more relatable to readers.
Additionally, consider refining the structure of the poem to create a more cohesive flow. You may want to experiment with different poetic devices such as meter, rhyme, or stanza breaks to enhance the overall rhythm and structure of the piece.
Overall, your poem effectively captures a sense of defiance and self-acceptance. By
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