Viviana Smith
Viviana Smith
Oct 14, 2020

Wander

looking around in real life
is better than looking at a flat world
seeing all the places you want to go
are better than imagining them
go out into the world and get lost
don't hide behind that paper map
when wandering you don't need any instructions
so don't go try to read them

A line is like a knife cutting a person or a place in half
what would our world be without maps
chaotic and wild
everyone likes to have a set of rules
or a boundary line to stand behind
I would just pack a bag and the clothes on my back
then cross that stupid boundary line
and explore the world it hides behind

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Texas USA

Favorite Poets: Shel Silverstein

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Comments

Geezer

you have done a fine job here. My only suggestion is that in the last line of the first verse, you use [trying] to read them.
Nice stuff! ~ Geez.
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