At the bottom of a large glass
Dies, tommorrows virtue
Saintly vision; hears not
Its tethered wings
Are blind
The maverick eye; feels not
Lidded affliction
Casts its thoughts towards sleep
Feb 19, 2013
Vission
About This Poem
Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
CS
There is a sadness about this piece, as if the author is feeling a sense of futility, I hope not, lol..
Should the Title be "Vision" with one "s".
Take care and keep writing, Yours Ian.T
I though thre vission
Was almost like fission and so had some expressiveness with the write