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Jun 23, 2011

This poem is part of the workshop:

Cliches and their use

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Unoriginal (Cliche Workshop)

I'm game
Fresh as a summer's rain
A rolling stone gathering
no moss
A mile a minute

My frame
The lesser of two evils
Is a necessary evil
My acid test
Rotten to the core

I'm sane
Nose to the grindstone
The icing on the cake
that knocks
the cover off the ball
and Knocks that ball
Right out of the park

My blame
is love is blind
free as a bird
deeper than the deepest
ocean when
silence is golden
Like a seven year itch
scratched bloody
and silent.

My flame
is hot to trot
when too many cooks
spoil the broth
as scarce
as hen's teeth
It ain't nothing but
a chicken wing
All hands to
the pump.

My crime
is age
before beauty
my name
is keeping it on
the downlow
My claim
originality
a dime a dozen
my reality.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne

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Comments

nicely done

great write really good flow off my tongue

Thanks Barb,

but Lord, it makes my teeth grind with embarrassment, it so bad! LOL

Chrys

Don't ever
ever ever
never ever
ever
ask me to write this kind of thing AGAIN.

LMAO

Jim

Jim,

one of your best, this one makes no sense at all which is a vast improvement on your usual stuff!

Kindest regards & LOL!

Jim

i like what you did with each first word in the stanzas.
Great job!

Eddie

Jim

Like me you have made your poem a little list like, it's really hard not to when it's jam packed with clichés. But having said that you have managed to craft a decent poem from the myer LOL!!!

Great job

Lou

Jim

i know how difficult it is to make a piece out of those Cliches ..it truly is a hair pulling stuff to achieve some kind of stuff out of it..but having a go at it is good enough...

regards...

I had a little accident which prevented me from being here for the vote. Sprained wrist. Getting better with ice and a removable brace. I would have voted for yours. A fine string of drivel, as intended.

:)
Cat