I am an unknown address
a cut and paste from me to you
solitude to solitude
an immense intimacy
of intimate immensity
a primitive pleasure
this language of the gesture
sometimes defying convention
dissolving the literal
moving from eye to ear
to inner ear
to inner eye
the reader and writer
albeit short;
a marriage of sorts
Last Few Words: a work of Intertextuality
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Short but...
deep thoughts! Yes, I do think it is kind of like a marriage of sorts. But then again, I guess anything that you contact or contacts you is a marriage. It's just that sometimes, it's over before you are ready. This poem was of just the right length, it engaged me with the title, A short courtship with the first stanza and then the body enjoyed and the final stanza with the injection of the ejection; divorced! Nice work, thanks. ~ Geezer.
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Hi Geezer
Many thanks to for commenting ….Im delighted you like it ;)
Best Z
Methinks you would...
be just as delighted if I hated it. LoL. ~ Geezer.
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haahaahaa..... well not
haahaahaa..... well not really but Id have to roll with it wouldn't I :)
I was...
thinking that I've seen you spend just as much time engaging in discourse about an opposite point of view as if a shining accolade. You roll well, with whatever comes your way. I like that. ~ Geezer.
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Hi Geezer
Thank you my friend ….I try....Most all have good intensions here and one tries not to take oneself to seriously,,,Its also often interesting to see others point of view and I have learned a lot