Some Ghosts in the past deserve not to be forgiven,
Times and crimes won't ever be re written.
Don't even give them a skeptical second chance,
Whether it be in a rotten friendship or a toxic romance.
Jun 10, 2021
Unforgiven
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Really peeved about being expected to give toxic people in my life second chances because of their title "mother" "daughter" and "friend" In my opinion if these people hurt you and continue to do it then they can't care about you, so you're better cutting them out of your life for your own peace of mind. Don't feel bad about cutting people out of your life when they practically handed you the scissors.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Wow… spot on
This could describe my in-laws to a “T”….
Only one thing...
I would change the word [where] to whether. Other than that, this one is good. The title is a little plain, but it tells the tale.
There could be a little more to this one, while trimming the lines, could spruce it up!
~ Geez.
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Poem
It's a 4 line poem how much more do you want me to trim?
You can...
Delete the words that you don't really need to make your point, while still being coherent.
~ Geez.
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