Understanding

Forsaken moments ravage sour memories
forced to form a never-ending yearning
that excruciating agony has carefully sewn
to keep me bound to his own tiny headstone

There's understanding Chronos does not heal
but forms a scar that, with time, simply fades
to every other's vision but my own
and sometimes I have fancy that he's been betrayed

The All Great Healer is Himself a hypocrite
It does not, I have found, truly get easier
but simply wrapped and bandaged 'til familiar -
therefore made to seem soothed, benevolent -
thus becomes bearable, less bitter

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many

Comments

fuckin brilliant

well crafted but still raw with emotion, no poet can strive for more.

I guess you know the line-
and sometimes I have fancy that he's been betrayed
is a bit clunky.
its a big change, you might have to look for one like
and I think he may well have been betrayed

thanks so much jess

i do see that line is chunky
- anything shorter i have tried doesn't say it...

i decided to leave the length... it does come out as triplets...
and it makes the reader (or at least it makes me :) ) pause at the end of that stanza
- hopefully alowing the digesting of the previous before the next point....
- lol - do let me know if you disgree xx
love judy

Dear Judyanne,

Yes... as Jess says, it is a brilliant piece!

There's understanding Chronos does not heal
but forms a scar that, with time, simply fades
to every other's vision but my own
and sometimes I have fancy that he's been betrayed

always, Cat