over 6 months deleted
Mar 01, 2016
two in one
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
over 6 months deleted
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Peachy or the Pitz
a tough Nut to crack
Neo is Neo
the punk slam dance
days are done
shocking is not
a club scene
its direct horrid
violence
not lurid composition
but it leaks through
here and there
shows its teeth
so we must be
vigilant
and gallant
enough
to exercise
some restraints
when the world
prefers not to
anymore...
thank U!
at times we all must follow
the PIED PIPER OF HAMLIN
HE
alone will lead us away from sorrow
ere comes tomorrow
always interesting way U look at things...that dark wit
pied piper lead too sorrow..he took all the able bodied children
away....only the lame was left behind and He Missed his pals..
tomorrow.....what of the future then...
Interesting
Thank U!
the good ones gone ..at a miserly mayors adverse intentions
but the lame one
was left behind
may be lame
but able to produce many a dame
he must have
as Hamlin remains unchanged
humans sprung up
may be from his millions
which in his pouch did remain
he was generous
he distributed all
none was born lame
kindness esker
we should two
now lead poets
like Hamlin at Neo too
will YOU!