With a series of chants
and a supernatural song,
one can be lifted in "twilight"
and be suddenly, gone !
Be not ambiguous
float your heart, high,
savor each moment
and cherish, each "sigh".
Should gravity lean, "heavy"
and cause one to, sway,
find solace, profound
that one's frame bends, that way;
and as the eve swallows
the day, into night;
respect every law
that governs, "twilight"!
Comments
i really like the way this rolls off the tongue doc
even though i don't really know what you are saying.....
i absolutely love:
'Should gravity lean heavy
and cause one to, sway,
find solace, profound
that one's frame bends that way'
a very interesting write
love judy
xxxx
Thanx Judyanne....l
...for your very generous remarks. I really can't say what I was trying to say....probably nothing.
Sincerely,
doc.
Doc
As the norm, an intriguing write with a very smoth rhythm and attention to detail. It always bothers me when I cannot find anything to critique about a poem as I feel I am not doing my share. I was impressed with the quality of this one. Very well done sir.
As always, Rett....
...I'm late responding. Thanx soo very much for the compliment.
Always good to see you commenting. Because whether or not you realize this....every time you give a response, there are quite a few that listens; irregardless as to your content of your reply.
Fear not, friend poet! I'm always one that does.
Very sincerely,
doc.
twilight
hey doc,good to be reading you again.Only suggestion is to remove "by " in line 8..........scribbler
Sir scribbler....
...I did that. So, it's okay, now?
L.o.l.!
later,
doc.
Hmmm...
Theme-wise, I'm always interested in supernatural writes, and appreciate them most when people get them right. You did.
The poem has got this air of sereni
Well, Mr. W.S.G....
...I wrote this quite a while, ago; I'm really thrilled that yopu liked my effort. Thanx, soo very much.
Very sincerely,
doc.