Simon
Simon
May 10, 2021

The Tunnel

I'm in my darkest day
I can't see a little in it
I'm calling out for help
If there is any one out there
Show a little kindness
Shine your light to brighten my day
Or scream my name
So I can hear and find a way to the daylight

The light I had was killed by haters
Now darkness arose the day
For the steps I take
I hit the wall and get hurt
From my growing up was a brighter time
With so much visions and dreams
Never I thought about been trapped
And strucked by this darkness

Darkness of greed and selfishness
Blood tasters and looters
The darkness of corruption and conspiracy
Porverty and insecurity
And calamities arisen
All the days getting darker
Darker than the night itself
Only if lux of heaven shines upon us.

About This Poem

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About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , abuja

Favorite Poets: Any good poet of my likening

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

3 years 11 months ago

and there are lights to shine. If enough people shine their lights at the same time, maybe we can guide to the end of the tunnel. I am sorry for your country's troubles, maybe someday, all the people in your country will stand up at the same time and the darkness will be defeated. I think that day is not far off. I hope that it goes well. You are a great voice for the people, keep writing. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

I know it is a difficult time for you with the troubles of your country. but try to be strong and hold on to your dearest beliefs. do not allow the people of the times to drag you down. please let the light of hope beam in your heart and soul.

*hugs, Cat

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Simon

Simon

3 years 11 months ago

Your words alone has given alot of relieves and hope, besides dead and trouble are just a reality but hurt anyways I'll be strong and wait for a better daylight thanks once more.