"Despair", My faithful companion
I can always count on you
When no one else cares
You are always there
I think I would miss you
If you ever moved on
Where would I turn?
How would I manage?
Would my days be filled with "Hope"?
Might I find "Security" in your absence?
I think they are mighty poor friends
To abandon me so easily
I do not trust them...
Comments
Hi Geezer
For someone like you who is so skilled in rhyme this one appears to have lost its way somewhere...i could also not connect how from a Loved one you have moved to friends? Being in draft stage you may still be working on these aspects...
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pray
do specify
to whom this poem
is addressed
I thought I had...
made the meaning clear, that "Despair" is who I am speaking to. I capitalized Despair, Hope and Security; thinking that they would be accepted as entities. Maybe I should put them in quotation marks. Please read again, with the quotations and see if it does not make sense then. I spoke to Despair as though it were something always with me and I would not know how to live in it's absence.
I then asked the question; "Would my days be filled with "Hope" and "Security"? And lastly said that I did not trust them, if they would abandon me so easily. See? This is one time of many that punctuation is useful. ~ Geezer.
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yes I thought as much
as despair and I are twins
no one reads or comments
so I know I am always there
as in
living
DESPAIR
Thank you Mark...
I appreciate the thought that you have put into reading and commenting on my poem. As I have said to Serendipity, it seems as though "Despair" has been such a constant companion to my son, that he doesn't trust a life without it. Hope and Security have abandoned him so quickly and often, that he doesn't trust how they feel.~ Geezer.
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Oh Bro, I dont know what to
Oh Bro, I dont know what to say
This poem hits close to home
as I'm sure you understand.
Bravo *applause*
Love and higgliest bugs Sis xxx
I thought...
that you would get it; that I was speaking to "Despair" and "Hope" and "Security" as if they were entities. In the short, "Despair" being such a close companion to my son, I have looked upon it as being a constant. My son has said to me a number of times, that when he is having a good time and enjoying some "Hope" and "Security", that he feels weird, like something is going to go wrong at any minute, and he will find himself again, keeping company with "Despair", that the other two, [hope and security] have abandoned him yet again. It is a very difficult thing to live with. I do understand. Thanks for your read and comment. Love and higgest bugs, ~ Bro.
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Hm, your poem made me smile.
Hm, your poem made me smile.
I share your admiration to despair, out of it many tough things are done.
Another sister is anxiety, one must be anxious to want to learn new things, work hard or create.
Good poem, pleasure to read.