TOYLAND
I turned the light to dim
as day was slowly dying
into Horizon blue
crimson red.
shadows of a pale sun
danced across my bed.
the noise of living faded
into dream
where I found peace
again.
TOYLAND
I turned the light to dim
as day was slowly dying
into Horizon blue
crimson red.
shadows of a pale sun
danced across my bed.
the noise of living faded
into dream
where I found peace
again.
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Comments
A soft and warming poem with
A soft and warming poem with overtones of melancholy it seems. You have a talent for clarity and brevity.
Joe
I appreciate that, my friend.
I appreciate that, my friend.
joe longo-geremia-ruffolo