The poetry please!
today there is a burning fire within me
to perform a newer kind of poetry
this ignites the infallible minds of humanity
such a kind of poetry
where two lovers face one another
and
as one smiles
air-full of kisses fly
and
the crowds in great abandon....
hide behind a veil of time
no clouds are needed...
they all want an audience blind
so be it my way to say
stay
do read my works
once in a way....
have a good night or day
where ever you are...
You may...
This is another thought of the day!
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burning fire
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If you got rid of the commentary, this would be a good poem, with a few small changes it could be amazing, you have some great lines in this its just a shame you spoil it with all the fru fra...
love Jayne x
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any better tis?
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I second what Jayne has said about the intro..
The theme and the write doesn't need it,
as it can stand on its own words,
Yours Ian.T