Tick talks
of father time
is menacing
Intrudes
silence of
my solitude
Wrecking
wakeful sleep
like a witch hunt
Tick talks
of father time
is menacing
Intrudes
silence of
my solitude
Wrecking
wakeful sleep
like a witch hunt
Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Very good! Honest words. Real
Very good! Honest words. Real feelings.
The poem I love. It looks like a second take of the same theme that was in the Sunku with moon.
This one has your words, it is more unique.
It is better.
Thanks IRiz for the read and
Thanks IRiz for the read and your encouraging comment. Feels good to know I am improving..
Regards..