Congregational prayer session
Like the village market I used to go
This world filled with blares
Noises designed to deceive
Pleading to sell and to seduce
Babbling strange impenetrable tongues
Spreading fear of impending doom
With overwhelming wind of din
As earthquake, typhoon and tsunami
In the mist of this cacophony
Take a step and pull away
Listen to the indwelling spirit
The still small voice of the soul
And it shall be well with you
Nov 02, 2011
TAKE A STEP AWAY
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Rosi
yes, it is good you mentioned mass, further on, schism brought in the protestants calling for a brand of spirituality that promotes rowdy prayer sessions where everybody shouts out prayer. I often ask myself who God will be listening to. you will hear the other man shouting on to of his/her voice to God. Pentecostalism encourages this compared to the silent prayer and the list of benefits are endless. I prefer the way of the heart, where conscience, the still small voice take control of the man. Thank you and best wishes.
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