lou
lou
Nov 18, 2010

Sweet Torture

Orgasmic, 
Nuclear melt down, 
Stark raving lunacy.

Limbs shake with seismic
Intensity.
Body craves you, like heroin.
 
You'll be the end of mortality,
I can't release you, need to,
Rap myself around you.

On the edge  of a precipice,
And I want to fall.
Sweet torture .

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 4 months ago

Lou,

how did I miss this one?

You managed to capture the 'frustrations' well in this piece. Great title too!

"I can't realise you, need to" - should that be 'release'?

Wanting to fall off the precipice....brilliant!

HS

lou

lou

14 years 4 months ago

In reply to by Hooded Stranger

Glad someone finally found this one in the wilderness LOL.

Well you know i'm the typo queen LOL

thanks HS

Lou

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 4 months ago

In reply to by lou

Dear typo Queen,

you need to remove the space between 'my' and 'self' and make it one word.

Lol!

It was out in the wilderness, but it needs to be brought back into the stream.

regards,

HS