All run after me
my knees
are now
extremely weak
let me fall and bleed
they'll suck it
my blood is too sweet
All run after me
my knees
are now
extremely weak
let me fall and bleed
they'll suck it
my blood is too sweet
Last Few Words: As life ebbs body curls
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Are you feeling...
as though you are being stalked? Do you feel like you have run as far as you can with your poetry? That people are running you down to suck the life's blood of your work from you? We all feel that way sometimes. You are still pertinent, don't worry, be happy! Geez.
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You are still pertinent, Juss poetry not muchly
no worry,
am
still happy!
Geez.
thanks glad you screen me
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I'm torchlighing this verse
I think I need a chisel to break it apart. LoL!
Very apt and highly condensed.
"my blood is too sweet" that's a terrific imagery.