Our love
Like winter’s
Dead twiggy trees
Two ships
In the night
Missed each other
The search
For our love
Halted long ago
Our love
Like winter’s
Dead twiggy trees
Two ships
In the night
Missed each other
The search
For our love
Halted long ago
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
I love your poem
I was thinking about how many stanzas are good for Sunku. Three felt somehow the best.
By writing longer stream you add a dreamy, contemplating touch to the form.
It is a free form and I respect your choice.
I like the way you increase the size of the gap between your characters
Thank you for sharing your poem
Three stanzas good
When I write I get carried away when it’s a new form.