on the subject of roses

does it hurt to be
a thorn
on the rose?

I do not know such
things,

sometimes the
sting of words
rains tears in my eyes
and my lips start to bleed...

sun drenched veins on the leaf
surge through apple-buttered skies

words fall to the wayside,

roads we have yet to travel
to roses we have yet to touch.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This poem started out as a dance with Mona's poem.. Thank you again.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ohio, USA

Favorite Poets: Bokonon: “Let your life be the poem you write”.

Comments

Hi JC~

These days punctuations are mostly absent in my poems, i try to make the words punctuate the poem. ;-0

Great Anna

I see no room for improvement to suggest. I love the way it reads

"I love that picture of you, like a true Southern Belle or Northern Lady" i appreciate this statement you made about my picture, thanks I just notice it.