Summer days, moisture's haze,thrunder brays,lightning's laze
sun goes,thunderhead grows,windows close, wildlife knows
hard wind,trees bend, warnings send,picnic's end
puoring rain,loud refrain,hail's pain
river's gain. house shakes
bough breaks
drowns snakes
knee quakes
rains slack
clouds wrack
blue crack
sun's back
cool blows,run-off flows,storm goes,rainbows
Last Few Words: Just another write transferred from old site. An example of "concrete" or "form" poetry
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hi Rose
Haste makes mistakes lol.Will correct.........................stan
Loved the rhyming and I am
Loved the rhyming and I am not one for straight forward rhyming. But the picture you formed with the words was great. It put the finishing touch on the power of the storm. Been a while since I have seen someone do this, loved it.
Kim
(V)
hello Kim
It started out a a straight vertical line of pairs of rhyming words. Did not like the way it looked, so I changed form and accidentally fell into form poetry lol. Been trying to do one on purpose ever since...............scribbler
See what happens when you're
See what happens when you're looking the other way? lol! It worked out perfectly.
hi
You can be fairly confident if I do something right it is probably by accident lol..........scribbler
unique rains
pour and creative poetry galore
hello
thank you
for review..............stan
hi
yes, the picture is much clearer without double spacing..........stan
Hi Ian
When I originally posted this I was told it is called either concrete or form poetry. A poem in which words are arranged so as to form a picture of what poem or at least part of poem is about. I have seen a nonet here a few weeks ago and will likely try one before too much longer.............stan PS I guess that makes this a none nonet lol
hi
Glad to have accidentally been of help lol............stan
lol
If it helps, the only time I'm any good it is by pure accident........................stan