To spend
in love's language
is to spend ''it'' wisely
for lovely kids
the night watches silently
you are breathless
so is she
spend the night
not with me
but her beholding
spend well
your hidden energy
To spend
in love's language
is to spend ''it'' wisely
for lovely kids
the night watches silently
you are breathless
so is she
spend the night
not with me
but her beholding
spend well
your hidden energy
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hi loved
Any particular reason you capitalizes line 4?. Also you might consider changing "lovers'" to love's......don't know why, just seems better lol...........stan
gracious Stan
at times it looks nice
to know
has been read
by poetry papa's
lol ha ha
Loved
Well one of your better presentations, not sure if the word Progeny is suitable for a night of well spending..
The word could be used as an outcome of such actions , But loved the piece anyway, Yours Ian ..
an interesting take
telling your progeny to go with his beloved and make whoopee, rather than spend the night with you.
Why would he not do so. He could have dinner with you, and her for a long desert afterwards, no?
I don't see the conflict, but I like your libertine attitude.
I feel the pleasures
Eumol as and when you visit me
but while u were reading
I was directed to abandon
PROGENY
which I did as asked by IAN