zach
May 31, 2024
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoet Weekly 05/26/24 to 06/01/24

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somehow

somehow you’re everywhere
you’re in the street lights
that bring life to the dark
you’re in the leaves of a sycamore
in an evergreen kind of way
the birds look to you for help
in singing the sweetest songs
at night the Aurora searches
for it’s lost colour in your eyes
i longed for that light, now I’ve found it
and somehow
its more beautiful than I could’ve imagined

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Quebec, Canada

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neopoet

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "somehow" effectively conveys a sense of interconnectedness and beauty through vivid imagery and personification. The repetition of "somehow" creates a contemplative tone and suggests a sense of wonder and discovery. The imagery of street lights, sycamore leaves, birds seeking help in singing, and the Aurora searching for color in the eyes of the beloved all contribute to a rich tapestry of nature and emotion. The final lines bring a sense of fulfillment and awe at the beauty found in this connection.

One suggestion for improvement could be to explore more varied and unique metaphors or similes to further enhance the depth and complexity of the poem. Additionally, paying attention to the flow and structure of the poem could help strengthen its overall impact on the reader.

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Geezer

this is beautiful and lovely work. My one fault with it is; "the birds [long] to you help in singing the sweetest songs. I think you meant [looked] to you for help in singing the sweetest songs. Other than that, I like it a whole lot. ~ Geezer.
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Rula

Rula

11 months ago

This is awesome!
I like everything about it and thought it deserves a better title, but that is only me
Enjoyed it
Thank you for sharing.

Z

Thank you for your reading and sharing your thoughts! I use “somehow” as an analogy to describe my love for a person, to an extent of which I can’t describe. However with your thoughts in mind I will find a different title if it comes to me.

L

there's nothing better than that feeling and there's nothing else like reading about it.