Bryan
Bryan
May 25, 2012

So Glad to Be with You

“Hello, how are you? I’m Emily.”
“Emily, it’s Bill. I’m so glad to be with you.”
That said we go for a walk.
Wind our way through the town, we
were born here, married, raised children.
Strolling past the cemetery holding our parents,
Emily comments on the lovely statue of St. Michael.

“Hello, how are you? I’m Emily.”
“Emily, it’s Bill. I’m so glad to be with you.”
That said we go for a walk.
Sitting on the bench under the elm tree
looking across to the playground where we
watched our children grow and learn cooperation,
Emily comments on the stately statue of George Washington.

“Hello, how are you? I’m Emily.”
“Emily, it’s Bill. I’m so glad to be with you.”
That said we go for a walk.
Down to the river where we swam as children
sitting on the fallen log where sixty years ago we sat
and I proposed and Emily completed me,
Emily comments on the rustic covered bridge.
And every day with Emily continues to complete me.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Mass, USA

Favorite Poets: Adelaide Crapsey

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Comments

judyanne

this brought a lump to my throat
the emotion is raw in this poem
the repetition so effective, especially the ‘that said we go for a walk’

and that last line, well...
‘and every day with Emily continues to complete me’, although I wonder if, instead of ‘and’, you might consider ‘still’ ?

excellent write
love judy
xxx

loved

loved

12 years 11 months ago

“Hello, how are you? I’m Emily.”
“Emily, it’s Bill.
I’m so glad to be with you.”
That said we go for a walk....

then throughout our lives
we talk...
both together
now Emily says
You first listen to me..
lovely Emily..

And of course now sweet Bill..
Sure enough better would have been Jill...
hahahahahahha..lololololol