Shall we prepare love, for a winter's day?
A snow filled sally to a sloping hill
You have a car sir and I have a sleigh
We have warm clothes love, please do say you will
A fire to warm us, we can be alone
A picnic basket, filled up with delights
Won't say where we go, and turn off the phone
We will stay for hours, mayhap until night
A sonnet for you, kisses for my face
Wine with the cheeses chocolate candy
Come with me darling, down hill we will race
It will be such fun, it will be dandy
I love you sweetheart, say you love me too
Hearts together beat, I only love you
Comments
Gee
This is the best Sonnet I have seen in many years here,
that it would be a mir akle if I produced a sonnet let alone one to this quality..
I may try to produce one but I am not even going for second place this time..
Yours as always Ian ..
Thank you Ian...
I wasn't sure that I could do it! I had to go look up the rules for producing a sonnet.
It was hard, but fun. As ever, ~ Gee.
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What a delightful
read Gee. I can't but agree with sparrow.
My only thought is that you either punctuate it all through or leave it altogether.
Thank you for sharing.
I did...
have some reservations about the punctuation and I will attend to it. Thank you for the kind words. ~ Gee.
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Nice
Really deep and beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you Sir...
It is, to me, one of the most difficult forms. You have to be rigid in the expression and yet produce something that makes sense and is appealing to the reader. ~ Geezer.
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Cute.
But a bit sloppy and sentimental.
A bottle of champagne per head in the picnic basket would spice things up a bit.
Thank you Edna...
As I said to Ian, I had to look up the rules for producing a sonnet and then to choose one form from among the half-dozen or so. It was to be either a dramatic piece or a sloppy romantic. I choose the romantic, it being the easiest to produce. I do suppose that I could have done a dramatic, drunken piece that consisted of a prurient nature, but decided that proper was the way to go.
~ Geezer.
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Tapping into the feminine
Tapping into the feminine side perhaps!
I don't mind sloppy at all if its well written, as this is.
Obi.
Thank you Sir...
Good to see you. Thanks for the kind comment. In truth, as I was writing this, I was reminded of the time a girl asked me to take her sleigh-riding, so yes, from a feminine point of view. ~ Geezer.
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Reading this again
With fresh eyes, most lines deviate from pentemeter.
I still love it though.