neon webs
bounce, the boom
a blended haze
saturday slinkers
crowding
burst of youthful lust
horns and hubbub
the splash and spill
drums pounding
deep into the wilds
the joint's gone high-octane
swelling
hot
joy's ragged edge
feral
uninhibited
exhilerating
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Hi Brittle Light
This is a tonic for a winters day! All the joy, sights, sounds and colours roll together in a joyful carnival party.
Love the language and imagery.
Thanks for sharing!
Love Mand xxxx
Hello Mand
thank you so much for your thoughts
I do appreciate them....even though this reply is so late....my bad! (manners)
Al
Loved the write, but do I detect a little laze there when using "feral" as a single line.
There are quite a few poets using this word, leaving it up to the reader to make their own picture of a very wide scope.
Am I being picky here when I would rather have three words than one to describe something ?????
If I am just ignore me, lol Yours Ian
Ian
I shan't ever intentionally ignor you....Just simply disagree sometimes
thanks for at least making me re-think my position, and choices.
sorry for the late responce
Al
There is so much to like about this poem, I loved it and I adored the ending it felt exhilarating ;)
nothing to crit, except I disagree with Ian's comment on feral (sorry Ian lol) I like it on its own, giving all the imagery that goes with it and for me it sets up the ending perfectly
I have to give you kudos I loved it
love JC xxx
JC
Damn xx
Ian
Sorry lol xxx
JC
thanks...my hero (heroine) coming to my rescue from mean ol' Ian...His reputation is now suspect!!!
glad you enjoyed the piece
Al
My cave is dark and deep
I retreated for a sleep
A rest from all my friends
Who have taunted me no end.
My snores never reach the doors
As there ain't any on a cave
I love all my friends they keep me alive.
So you're lucky Digit is here with me
I will let him free after xmas you see
So you'd better stay my friends
or come to nasty ends lol
He can be a lovely fellow.
Of late he's been quite mellow
Though I think he's a funny guy and quite
Feral
La la..
Have a lovely Christmas and my love to all those around you,
Yours Ian.T
Ian
and Merry Christmas to you and all Merry ol' England!
Yep!
Liked this a lot!