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Jul 18, 2012

simply wasted breath

simply wasted breath
The elite poets have already spoken

being adept at free verse
not boasting of being a poet at all,
I feel you have the potential
of the highest mountain,
shielding a volcano to explode.
and explode you must,
as well as explore
beyond the realms
of the poetic constraints

Shakespeare wouldn't have been living till today,
had he stifled himself
with poetic limitations
In which we prefer to chain...

you are that light,
rising at the dawn of existence,
hurt and have feelings
of human creation
you excel at the most.

God bless you child .
forgive me if in my analysis
I've gone wild.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: ROU

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Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 9 months ago

A deep piece of how we restrict our ways as we write, that is why I like Auto writing it brings in another dimension which we wouldn't see otherwise, this one needs to be acted on and the words must flow,
Yours Ian.T

loved

Do show
how the words
must flow

Ian.T

This poem as St George said is one of your better one.
The message you give is the thing to be acted upon.
Your words flow always in the lilt of the Bard.
Please continue to do so but there are many great poets that you can reflect on, Yours Ian.T

Ian.T

Your words and layout are most times of the Bard type layout and words.
Can we not "Wander lonely as a crowd" or "Be in England now that April is there" to quote lines from other poets.
I think that I can remember more quotes from the Bible than poetry lol
Some of your works as Jess often says are brilliant and they are Loved's
Hope you see what I mean now, Yours Ian.T

William Saint George

This is the best poem I've read all morning. These lines really cut deep

"Shakespeare wouldn't have been living till today,
had he stifled himself
with poetic limitations
In which we prefer to chain..."

I think we can make a mark and really progress if we make for out time "new limitations", if you get me.

"God bless you child .
forgive me if in my analysis
if* I've gone wild."

Is that extra "if" needed?

S

sounds like this might be a transplanted comment but that doesn't matter as it stands well on its own.........stan

loved

Stan?
I composed it for that gal
she never even
cared to read it

what a waste of comment
and my lament,
has you all sent
to commend
ok comment..