A slow cool midday trek
speed determined by old legs
through a forest of mixed trees
tall but hardly hoary
No hint of habitation anywhere
no crumbling chimney
abandoned well
teetering walls
or sagging fences
Until topping a small rise
where I espy with aging eyes
a sight that takes me by surprise
A silo
not a sterile Harvestore
of cold blue steel and nothing more
nor of concrete blocks banded
nor poured in place cement
This one aged and empty
built of varied native stone
to a scale that's human
not looming
Kicking nearby duff reveals
a buried barn foundation
its wood gone back to soil
just old concrete and a few rusted nails
of forged form
I pause to think
and the surrounding landscape transforms
trees disappear in reversed growth
fence posts appear and slowly straighten
at last gaining old type barbed wire
which rapidly unrusts
dividing small past lush pastures
where Holstein ghosts graze
until.......
I now stand in midst of a dairy
modest house on the next hill
horses and mules, no tractors
But imagination stops
farmer's family left un-recalled
'twould lead to unwanted questions
Where? did they go
What? happened here
Who? is left of the family tree
Why? did they leave
This is far too lovely a day
for such questions to be queried
So
wanting to retain sunny disposition
and to leave my mind unmuddled
I move on
to keep from thinking
Yet on certain types of days
clear ones when cool winds sway
I return there in my mind
and wonder about that old
silo
* realized it was time for another attempt at free verse................scribbler
Comments
Stan, all I can say is HOW
Stan, all I can say is HOW LOVELY THIS PIECE IS! I don't see any stumbling in this essay at free verse. Great.
Regards
Ayaz
hello Ayaz
I was beginning to wonder what had happened to you. I appreciate the visit and kind comment.......................stan
hi shirl
I'm experimenting all the time. thankfully most of them don't make it to here lol...................stan
hi Rosi
I had wondered how many would even know what a silo is lol. Thank you for the read and nice comment.................stan
Stan
this was beautifully done, and well staged. great job my friend.
i love the descriptions in this so wide and filling the imagination
stanza; 4
"not a sterile Harvestore
of cold blue steel and nothing more
nor of concrete blocks banded
nor poured in place cement"
loved it!
Eddie
hi Eddie
good to see you back. Glad you like my attempt at free verse............stan
I might if I can say, use
I might if I can say, use 'crumbled chimney' in L6 as it's followed by abandoned...this is good narrative and holds interest all the way to the end. The thing with free verse, even narrative like this is to beware of the filler words and pronouns and adjectives, we talk with a lot of them but in the showing of a poem's story they are not necessary, I always comb mine for where I can leave out some..it's editing and painfully slow but worth it :P
hello CC
I am always going back and editing stuff (as evidenced by this write). First you say I should add an adjective for chimney, then tell me to beware them lol.I fear even in my semi-rare free verse writes I tend to emphasize imagery by using them a lot. Will keep your ideas in mind when I eventually go back and edit this......again..............scribbler PS used crumbling instead of crumbled to convey a process still underway