Silent Synergy:

Mindful empathy
Extraneous apathy
Comes telepathy

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

Country/Region: Asia India

Favorite Poets: Rabindranath Tagore

Mindless empathy
Extraneous apathy
Chance telepathy

Got to hand this one to you - I preferred your version.