He took the words
Right out of my mouth
A fistful of dominance
An unspoken clout
He shook all confidence
Down to Hades' resting place my
A brutal backlash
Inflicting vulnerability and disgrace
May 12, 2020
Silenced
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
I think...
that you meant the line to read: "Down to Hades, my resting place." Highlighting domestic-abuse is no easy matter and you have done it in just a few lines. Well done. ~ Geezer.
~ Geezer.
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peggedit
domestic abuse either verbal or physical is uncalled for at any time
you've said quite a bit in two stanzas