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Mar 30, 2013

SHEPHERD

When storms wrack me in my life
you bring back gentle breeze.
When cold acts cut me like a knife
we walk to set my soul at ease.

During times of pain and doubt
I feel you right here at my side.
As my journey takes me all about
like earth, I know you will abide.

The church where I prefer to go,
hand made by time and sun and rain,
Mere chemistry won't make it grow
or let it heal a tired man's pain.

You guide me down the trails I take
and let me know when, oft, I stray.
When hot sun seems to nearly bake
you slake my thirst at end of day.

Let others say you are not there.
Blind eyes will never care to see
that you are nearly everywhere
but mostly here inside of me.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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F

Of love and the thoughts you express about your loved one

This is the best line
that you are nearly everywhere
but mostly here inside of me.

F

Of love and the thoughts you express about your loved one

This is the best line
that you are nearly everywhere
but mostly here inside of me.

Seren

Seren

12 years 1 month ago

it left me with a deep sense of peace

lovely lovely write

I cant see anything I would change or alter

love Jayne-Chloe x

S

Everybody needs an anchor in their life. For some it's religion, for others it can be a loved one. I am lucky to have both....................stan

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 1 month ago

Your God, your Love, that you have both and that they walk with you is reflected in all your words, and the ways you perceive things, Go well my friend the world will never harm you, as you hold the universe, Yours Ian.T

loved

loved

12 years 1 month ago

and I of my own
twain shall never meet

universe and eternity may

Stan yet from loving your poetry
I can't stay away..

you too do read me
once in a wild odd way!

S

I know of people who have neither and can't understand how they get through their days. Appreciate the visit........stan

S

Thank you. I read most things posted here but there are not enough hours in the day to comment on all I read lol. I'm pleased you found time to comment on this little scribble.................stan

Josephus

As you I find strength and solace in God. I envy the strength and intimacy of your relationship with your wife. You have expressed those values in ways I could never have. I value your God given talent.

There is a bit of Frost in you!

Joe