Loss reminds me
to appreciate the moments,
the beauty of time shared
This, the only kindness
grief seems willing to give
Luckily, memories know
to capture the fragments that remain
for refuge against the days to come
Oct 28, 2022
This poem is part of the contest:
Neopoem Of The Week October 23rd to October 29th 2022
Shelter
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Grief and love, surely tied for first place as inspiration for poetry.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Your title...
is good. I appreciate the link of idea, that you may need shelter in days to come, when depression over loss may become great. Indeed, love and grief are most likely to tie for the honor of first place in the writing of poetry. Great idea! ~ Geezer.
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Shelter
Hello, Michael,
Appreciating the present with the good and pleasant memories of the past so that you may find healing and comfort in the future. Seems to be written from experience. I, too, very much like your title. It offers consolation and hope.
Thank you!
L
Very accurate
This is about as true as it gets. Excellent and captivating of grief from a very pragmatic perspective.
Super job,
Tim