sexicity tis
we all can imagine
how difficult it's
to resist the dark raven black hair
strewn all about
and
then there remains no further invitation
without a doubt
one….!
you are marvelous
many will wonder
what you must have been
when youthful
as you perhaps are still
not still
roving discerning eyes
do kill
when tis
the till
with free will
May 11, 2013
sexicity
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Loved
This piece needs expanding with a little more body to it,
as it is it is flimsy, though the theme is sound, have a good read and see what you can do, Yours Ian.T
it's old now
I can't recollect the background
shall do when my mind
is refurbished