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Mar 29, 2020

Seasonal changes

We all look at seasons
as they come to go

in my place
it is always
Autumn's grace

All wait for lovely leaves fall
colorful fragrance the et al

of autumn's fall
all love it

come and see
my backyard's full of leaves
melee
in the play field
lovely belle

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

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Comments

Geezer

that your country has a very short summer season compared to ours. I like the sing song quality of this and the bit of rhyme thrown in. Of course, what may be a short summer for us/me may be as long to you as to us. I like the line: " colorful fragrance is the et all." Makes me think of the crisp smell of late roses and the color of the leaves at the same time.
~ Geezer.
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lovedly

Seasonal changes

We all look at seasons
as they come to go

in my place
it is always
Autumn's grace

All wait for lovely leaves fall
colorful fragrance the et al

of autumn's fall
all love it

come and see
my backyard's full of leaves
melee
in the play field
lovely belle

Eumolpus

a nice composition, (not entirely in time here in April O cruelest month), but many poeple are fall lovers. Here's some liberties I took with your poem. I cut the second stanza. the rest is just grammar and syntax changes. I would consider changing the title...don't make the poem about poetry, it's not. But it is a poem.

We all look at seasons
as they come to go

in my place
it is always
Autumn's grace

All wait for lovely leaves fall
colorful fragrance the et al

of autumn's fall
all love it

come and see
my backyard's full of leaves
melee
in the play field
lovely belle