Geezer
Geezer
Mar 09, 2018
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Ode To The Cellphone [March contest]

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Say What?... [March Contest Ode To The Cellphone]

As I touch the keys
let my thoughts come loose
Pictures come and go
using more damned juice

The linking that I share
with the world at large
To my credit, I must use
a phone to make a charge

Killer phones, they are
They’re holding me for ransom
They’re so sleek and fast
some are really handsome

Anticipate my needs
just scan my words before
Put their own words in
Don’t need to say it anymore

If I hesitate too long
pushing buttons, texting
I may find myself
in a conversation vexing

Give me some control
cell phone gods, I pray
Let me make one call
just one; going right today

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

7 years 1 month ago

Replacing our thoughts with theirs! Good write!

lonlyhrtsclub13

Sounds better with the rhythm cleaned up. Damn phone with a mind of it own.

S

All this tech crap is going to be the death of true conversation. I foresee great great grandchildren with atrophied tongues and over sized thumbs lol

R

I agree with you about over sized thumbs which is in sync with Darwin's Theory of Evolution ...
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Geezer

a cool visual on that one! Maybe thumbs with little points to facilitate the ever smaller buttons?
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