Suck me in your vortex
gorge me in those rapids
plunge me to the depths
grind me on the rolling stones
soak me in the orgasmic eruptions
to feel
what torments you
or is it
your coming of age
a celebration of teeming emotions
seeking release in a coitus
then meandering in the aftermath
with gentle waves wetting your loins
let me then tremble
with each ripple in your womb
to sense
your freedom from pubescence
and joy of riverhood
greening the pastures
let me be
the rolling stone
your rhyme
Dec 16, 2014
Rolling Stone
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This poem was inspired by an event in memory lane of a couple of years back, when I was standing at close range of a bursting Rapid which at the time felt to me like an emotional outburst of a river on its course. The images came back to me from the sub conscious which found words in this poem.
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
raj
raj
raj
I see you've told what inspired this. It is vivid. In fact so vivid with the painted images. However, if you haven't added those last few words, it would be read completely different. I think you know what I mean. This in fact adds (imo) to the power of the words and the overall piece and I would have given the reader a space to give his interpretation, unless been asked for an explanation. But it is your poem and I like it especially the rich voc. used.
Regards
Thanks Rula
for the read and your thoughtful comment. I know what you mean about the interpretation of the reader going haywire had i not added the last few words. I hadn't initially done it but got no comment so i thought that it may be viewed as lucid or lewd so the next day I added the "last few words" ..you know what i mean? Good to know you liked it and the vocabulary too.
Regards,
Phew! Raj
I can feel the passion - this is hot and steamy stuff! and yet tastefully done.
Well done Raj :)
Love to you
Mand xxxx
Thanks Mand
for the read and expressive comment :) Good to know you liked it.
Love to you too...
Regards,