Here at the waters edge.
Where forest limbs reach for me
There betwixt this greenery
And yon further bank
Within a quietened flow of life.
I hear my own hearts pulse
in sync with the rivers flow
hope you too are trying to see through
the pitch darkness
a light within me
that shines
my love only for ye
day in day out
be it summer
autumn or winter
through the snows of December
I still hear my faint heart’s
hope in murmur
you are somewhere there
waiting for me.
Comments
Loved
I like the theme but your first Stanza needs to be rearranged a little.
Standing in front of the river’s edge
inside a thick forest
looking beyond the river’s far edge
into the dense greenery
Something along the lines of:-
Here at the waters edge.
Where forest limbs reach for me
There betwixt this greenery
And yon further bank
Within a quietened flow of life.
I hear my own hearts pulse
in sync with the rivers flow
hope you too are trying to see through
the pitch darkness
a light within me
that shines
my love only for ye
Come young Bard,
Reach out for those words they are not hidden.
Yours as always, Ian.T
shall
You r wonderful
you post yours anew
rename it
you may
if u wish to
Loved
This was an outline of a suggestion from me not a new work lol you may adapt it if it is needed to your own words.
Go well young Bard we shall overcome these things, Yours Ian.T
it's so easy
It’s so easy
to correct and recompose
after reading someone’s prose
there are many poets out here
who can't reach out a word
unless my poetry
ten times they've heard