zebra
zebra
Jun 19, 2019

Ritual of Hedon

hot and close
i scum the moon
in her dusted bell of caves
and notched noir crotch

she got red like a thirsty knife
in flames oval then thin
till the blood candied
into sugar fruit
and I drew strength from her dreams
those teaming gutters of the sun

bimbo boys with tits and thick with makeup
watched startled
through a winking diorama
of jumbling cunts and kicking feet
in shades of lunar water

oh this compulsive dream
me touching myself
kissing her golden apple cunt
tabernacle of liquid jewels
curled split
jam slammed

this haunting mirage of desire
desire; born from having nothing

holding her face
tongue to tears
a lighted loon of sadness
cascades through fingers like bone dust
and i fall into myself

molasse's seep and gather
in a stone sea of wet music

vapor of darkness
mad nag hunger growls
meet me now!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: erotic

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Florance MA USA

Favorite Poets: Plath

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Comments

Simon

Simon

5 years 10 months ago

This piece is good I like its flows, keep this up.

Cloudthings

& as always an odd word or line that delivers an uncomfortable slap... I think it's worth it... I do very much love your wordsmithery. You write very potent cocktails (no pun intended.. maybe I should substitute cunt-tails?). Hahah.