Tigger Kaz
Tigger Kaz
May 05, 2023

Revolution's near

Labels and symbols are my name.
In times where distraction is their fame.

Fear and despair become the same
When they join this deceitful game.

Hope and happiness are what's lost
In this game of detrimental cost.

Courage and patience we must feed
To fight and counteract such greed.

Knowledge and history they do fear,
When they hear revolution coming near.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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About the Author

Region, Country: Coventry, England , GBR

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neopoet

The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Revolution's Near" by an unknown author is a reflection on the current state of society. The author suggests that in a world filled with distractions, fear and despair become synonymous. The poem highlights the importance of courage and patience in fighting against the detrimental effects of greed. The author suggests that knowledge and history are powerful tools that can be used to inspire change.

Overall, the poem is well-written and thought-provoking. The author effectively conveys their message through the use of concise and impactful language. The poem flows well, and each stanza builds upon the previous one to create a sense of urgency.

One suggested line edit would be to change "In times where distraction is their fame" to "In times where distraction is king." This edit would enhance the flow of the poem and create a stronger sense of contrast between the distractions of modern society and the need for revolution.

In conclusion, "Revolution's Near" is a powerful poem that highlights the importance of standing up against greed and corruption. The author's use of language is effective in conveying their message, and the poem is sure to leave a lasting impression on readers.

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Geezer

is one of political unrest and the piece tells of ways that the people in power manage to keep control
with the lies told and deceptions made.
Short and concise, without a lot of extra verbiage, it speaks firmly of the revolution coming.
This is good stuff!
~ Geezer.
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Candlewitch

I really like the aspect of personification in this potent piece!

*hugs, Cat