I wish I was as pretty as my shadow
I wish I was as easy to hide
I wish it was easy to tell the truth
and harder to tell that I lied.
Nov 13, 2018
(repost) shadow
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Comments
Good one.
Hits a few home truths for quite a few people I think.
You have talent, it needs work but it is there. That is why I got so furious with you about the last poem of yours I commented on.