Blue-eyed Bolla
Blue-eyed Bolla
Mar 10, 2023

Real Gone Rhyme

My poetry did charm and cheer
as I sat sobbing in my beer.
It held me (like a faithful friend)
when world of mine was at an end.

Throughout my lost and languid life,
(while shackled to a wolfish wife)
those stanzas bid me bide my time;
they sang sometimes; was so sublime!

In dungeon’s dank, dark days and nights;
temptations, trials, fond fancy’s flights;
when life had left me all alone,
and all my wildest oats were sown,

they whispered, in a still small voice,
(which made this rhyming rogue rejoice.)
They vowed true love would visit me
by streams of sweet serenity,

where I would tread my twilight years,
with Venus, through this vale of tears.
That from those sobs I’d sown in time
I’d reap romance and real gone rhyme!

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Buxton, Derbyshire., GBR

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Comments

Geezer

with the "real gone rhyme". Your pattern and rhyme is good, the language use is good, and the theme is one of a jocular- nature, that makes a great rhymer. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

Hello, KBloor!
I think this should be made into a drinking song sang at the pub as everyone clinks their mugs together! It's wild and wonderful! Hooray for your romance AND your real gone rhyme!
L