Softly, languid eyes worship you.
Each breath taken is in synchronicity,
two halves of the same reality
We traverse this hostile world,
rapped in the safety of our devotion.
The out side cannot get in.
The essence of my existence
the crux of it all.
Your are woven into every fibre.
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divine!
Nice work in your re submission!
The essence of my existence
the crux of it all.
Your are woven into every fibre.
always, Cat
Cat
thank you so much.
love lou
Lou
Stanza #1: a nice way to express the emotion of Love through mingling of breaths which also indicates a kiss
Stanza #2: are you trying to say that no material elements will disturb the harmony? if so you need to take a re-look and re-work on this
Stanza #3: nicely expresses union of heart n soul...
in my opinion if you tweak up stanza # 2 it will make this fine poem finer...
Raj
Thanks, I will take a look
Lou
Chyrs
Thank you
Lou