random contest topic (#4) It's Hard To Breathe
I Find It's Hard To breathe
when I see your morning face,
hair all tossed from sleep
I find it's hard to breathe.
whenever you speak my name
it sounds to me, like a poem,
I find it's hard to breathe.
when I hear you laugh
at some little thing I've said,
I find it's hard to breathe.
when you sit down beside me
taking my hands in yours,
I find it's hard to breathe.
whenever I hear your voice
so soft and low and mellow,
I find it's hard to breathe.
when you kiss me good night
softly upon my lips like a whisper
I Find it's ever so hard to breathe.
Comments
My dear Cat
A truly loving velum gentle romantic poem describing the gentile sentiments of a woman in love or how she wants to be in love
my dearest Dalton,
I thank you so very much. I stand in your debt.
*hugs, Cat
Yes...
I am in agreement! A woman so in love with her mate! Not a bit ashamed to say it! Language use is great, and the R, P and P
good too! Of course the theme appeals to me, and the beginning and end slide smoothly together. ~ Hugs for the girl, ~ Geez.
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dear Geezer,
tell me, what is the R, P and P? thank you for the excellent critique, it is greatly appreciated! after near 40 (on June 27th) years of marriage I still feel that way. I know he feel's the same as he tells me everyday
*hugs, Cat
It is...
Rhythm, pattern and pacing. ~ Geez.
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thank you Gee,
I'll remember that!
*hugs, Cat