RAISE THE FLAG

Here comes the moment:all things said must be done,
Set the legacy raising the banner of valour,
Raise the flag walking on coals of fire
Burning desire, passion, blazing, flaming, shameless
Dare to leap, time to soar awakens,
What's there to gain when here owns nothing,
Raise the flag

Raise the flag, flap your wings to fly,
Like a warrior never backing down, spear your bullets.
Raise the flag, fear no foe,
Let your Mark stand tall in the book of Revelations,
Finish strong, conquer all
Another phase, another prodigy,
Another test, triumphing testaments
Raise the flag

Raise the flag, till the day,
When it's night,no one dares to work,
When the sun set, no thoughts till the ground,
Raise the flag, set sail for greatness
Time will tell, the future remembers
Raise the flag

About This Poem

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About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , NGA

Favorite Poets: Niyi osunadare

Comments

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "RAISE THE FLAG" is a powerful and motivational piece that encourages the reader to embrace courage, determination, and perseverance. The repetition of the phrase "Raise the flag" throughout the poem adds emphasis and creates a sense of urgency. The use of vivid imagery, such as "walking on coals of fire" and "flaming, shameless," helps to evoke a strong emotional response.

One suggestion for improvement is to consider varying the structure and rhythm of the poem. Currently, the poem consists of three stanzas, each with a similar length and rhythm. Exploring different stanza lengths or incorporating varied line lengths could add more dynamic energy to the poem and enhance its overall impact.

Additionally, there is an opportunity to further develop the theme and message of the poem. While the poem encourages the reader to "raise the flag" and embrace challenges, it would be beneficial to provide more specific examples or metaphors that illustrate this concept. This would help to create a deeper connection between the

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