A tasteful spectacle
To the point
With vivid imagery I assure you
Which closed with a strange sadness
Leaving you happy in the stomach,
But distraught in the mind.
And alas
As the curtain fell
I clapped dearly in my heart
But all that was heard
Was my indifferent cough
Those who had laughed most enthusiastically,
Left the quickest,
And I,
Was now somewhat offended,
For crime had been committed against the arts,
I turned to my beloved cohorts to say,
“Did you like it?”
Only to be left with
“Yes, it was funny.”
Apr 27, 2014
Poignant End
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I just came home from a movie.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Hello
I liked this satire. Did you mean "Curtain" instead of "current" in the line 8 "as the current fell"?
Regards,
Hello, thank you for reading
Hello, thank you for reading the poem. And yes you are correct, it was supposed to be curtain. Small mistake, I'll make sure to change it. Thank you again for reading.
yes, it had me thinking...
...about how we keep ourselves distracted. I dunno - like listening to music, knowing the beat, singing the lyrics but not thinking about the meaning or emotions...
It feels like there is a strong correlation between your experience and the structure of the poem, which made me read it a few times, very cool.
The 'curtain fell' and 'the arts' made me assume you were at a theatre/comedy show... keep wondering what film you watched. Going back on it, I'll guess it was a drama/comedy;)
Sometimes I feel...
like I am the only one who really gets it. But, I have stopped trying to divine what others think about movies, music or something of the arts. if they really feel it and "get it", they will tell you so. it is a basic of human nature.
Nice work, ~ Geezer
very good piece, i enjoyed
very good piece, i enjoyed reading thank you