Blue-eyed Bolla
Blue-eyed Bolla
Jan 05, 2023

Poet True

If I had wings and poet’s skill,
a muse at hand and time to kill,
I’d scribe, for you, such noble verses
about the beauty Nature nurses
inside a bud, on bough with leaf,
where wonder is the main motif.

I’d take my pen, like Bard with quill,
pour forth a stream, sublime and still.
Place pleasant poem on the page,
a song of love that would not age,
sedate as moon or starry host,
or sea that creeps along the coast.

If Iines would gleam like dew at dawn,
lay down, like jewels, on leafy lawn.
They'd sparkle with the muse’s magic,
rewrite as tear-less truth the tragic:
have Hector and Achilles yield,
bid both lay down their sword and shield!

If I composed like kindly Keats,
wrote rhymes where earth and heaven meets,
my poems would be less pedantic;
they’d bloom like rustic rose, romantic.
Then I would be a poet true
and I would touch the heart of you!

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Buxton, Derbyshire., GBR

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Comments

Lavender

So much imagery to love - the "rustic rose" is especially charming and unique. The rhythm is smooth and adds to the delight of the poem.
Lavender

Geezer

change the first word of the third stanza
to read as It's. This is just about perfect!
Your word use is great and the placement of them
in lines of six, makes this a fun and quick read.
I wouldn't change anything else! ~ Geezer.
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Rula

Rula

2 years 3 months ago

do the same if I'm a "poet true"
V. Much enjoyed the read

Alex Tanner

A pleasure and a joy to read. Many should read it and take note.
Alex.