A Poem is Metaphor

rational thought
a geometry of flatulence
a poem is metaphor

I can kill you in a poem
and walk away scot free
so bend over
I got a gun in your ass
ready aim bang
I love you

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft