Sweetheart
please don't be mad at me
I skipped dinner
only to stay hungry
for YOU
Ah! you are smiling now
so I will skip the bites
and have you
for dessert instead
stay yummy for ME....
Jan 04, 2011
Pillow Note # 2
About This Poem
Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Dearest Shirl..
happy to know you are having fun..laughs and enjoying writing pillow notes and coming up with a really steamy one here..lol...keep at it..i am sure you will be able to post more pillow notes from your very creative mind...
with much love...
LOL
though you didnt capitalize...i loved the way you used "it"...in "don't even think about it"...leaving the reader with multiple choices to imagine what "it" could be....i would rate this as a mildly naughty pillow note..lol...
Dearest JayCee..
good to know you liked this one and it brought on a smile...nice to know too that you will be posting a Pillow Note hopefully very soon...
much love...
Dearest Xena...
thanks for your short and sweet comment....your comment made me happier because a pi;low note is supposed to have the elements you have mentioned..."delightful" & "romantic"...which is the essence of a pillow note...i am looking forward to others getting inspired to write pillow notes and post them...would be nice to see yours too..
much love..