like a cardinal
in a world of white
your heart
in this frozen place
you are a fire
with wings
the painter's
favorite color
Van Gogh's yellow
or Picasso's blue
the top point
of the golden triangle
at least in my world
you are the star
like a cardinal
in a world of white
your heart
in this frozen place
you are a fire
with wings
the painter's
favorite color
Van Gogh's yellow
or Picasso's blue
the top point
of the golden triangle
at least in my world
you are the star
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
I like this...
The title is good, it drew me in. Very good visuals, I particularly like the "you are a fire with wings".
I can relate to the colors being like moods. I think I remember a famous artist being in a "Blue Mood"? Was that Picasso? ~ Geezer.
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