tentacle ten table
octopus wing oscillate
quaterfoil moulded splayed lea
banqueting from Brighton
Saunders tapered padded
paneled sea trails cut brass
trellis elixir sprayed aprons
outline eastern wise men
dragons of habitual
above their firmament
inlay of prominence, water colour view
combining Gothic and oriental elements
electric fantastical fanatical
Mar 05, 2014
pavillion royal
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Emeka
I understand that this is a description of a structure but it would be enhanced with a story to hide in the place and a theme to bring out the words you have used even from a child's eyes view.
your poetry is running far too fast for most,
Take care talk to you more when time permits,
Yours Ian.T